Right- I always like peoples ideas and you’ve had tons of people tell you how good it is so i’m gonna jump right into my thoughts
*The opening of the prologue reminded me an awful lot of the saga of darren shan, it was okay in this context but i’d just make note of that, sometimes if you write and the same time as your reading a book I find that your story or characters can sound a lot like whatever you were reading when you read it back haha.
*With the cracks on the stairs i was thinking ‘show me don’t tell me’ Like it would be cool if you show him jumping over a step and hopping to the left or something rather than just telling us he knows where the cracks are.
*Character descriptions are good but I wouldn’t include so much description of clothes
I’m fairly sure i had other thoughts but i can’t remember what they were now