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Darren Shanster
Posted: 09 June 2012 05:34 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 106 ]
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CharlieNinjaa - 09 June 2012 09:17 AM

Limitless, no limits etc.

lol Limitless is a movie
^ lol again… every time I think Dark, I think the Dark Side of Nowhere, which is a really good book,
you could use Collision or something like that

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A book is your best friend when everyone else hates you.
I should never have cared. But I did care. I cared a lot. And I still freaking care.
Saying someone can’t be sad, because someone else may have it worse, is like saying someone can’t be happy, because someone may have it better.
Strong enough to walk away. Broken enough to look back.
I’m not mad at you. I’m just done with you.
The hardest part of letting go is realizing the other person already has.

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Ebony Raven
Posted: 10 June 2012 09:07 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 107 ]
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^ I’ve watched limitless. It’s the one with the super pill thing that opens up every part of your mind.

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Just close your eyes
And let it rain
‘Cause you’re never alone
I will always be there
You just carry on
You will understand

She does the best that she can to hide the scars
But long sleeves and make-up, it doesn’t get that far
She still finds a way to hate herself every single day
Stay strong

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Darren Shanster
Posted: 10 June 2012 10:21 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 108 ]
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^Yeah, that one :P

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A book is your best friend when everyone else hates you.
I should never have cared. But I did care. I cared a lot. And I still freaking care.
Saying someone can’t be sad, because someone else may have it worse, is like saying someone can’t be happy, because someone may have it better.
Strong enough to walk away. Broken enough to look back.
I’m not mad at you. I’m just done with you.
The hardest part of letting go is realizing the other person already has.

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Cheshire Cat
Posted: 16 June 2012 08:57 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 109 ]
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Darren Shanster84 - 09 June 2012 05:34 PM
CharlieNinjaa - 09 June 2012 09:17 AM

Limitless, no limits etc.

lol Limitless is a movie
^ lol again… every time I think Dark, I think the Dark Side of Nowhere, which is a really good book,
you could use Collision or something like that

What’s the “Dark Side Of Nowhere” about?

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When I’m bored, I send a text to a random number saying “I hid the body…, now what?”

Me: I am a Ninja!
Friend: No, you’re not!
Me: Did you see me do that?
Friend: Do what?
Me: Exactly!

#1 rule in an argument: If you’re losing, start correcting their grammar.

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Darren Shanster
Posted: 16 June 2012 10:03 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 110 ]
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it’s about a boy -I forgot how old, either 12 or 15- named Jason, who’s friend dies, and starts to realize weird changes in his life. The school janitor/security guard, gives him a glove that shoots BB gun bullets, and tells him to meet in the old abandoned part of town, where he finds out a horrible family secret, while trying to keep his new relationship alive.
It’s a sort-of Sci-Fi book, different to the books I normally read. Sorry, not the best discription, I haven’t read it in a while, so I’m trying to think of a way to put it without giving away too much information, but enough at the same time… sorry. Anyways, that’s the general idea. :D

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A book is your best friend when everyone else hates you.
I should never have cared. But I did care. I cared a lot. And I still freaking care.
Saying someone can’t be sad, because someone else may have it worse, is like saying someone can’t be happy, because someone may have it better.
Strong enough to walk away. Broken enough to look back.
I’m not mad at you. I’m just done with you.
The hardest part of letting go is realizing the other person already has.

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Death by stereo
Posted: 16 June 2012 10:53 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 111 ]
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Right- I always like peoples ideas and you’ve had tons of people tell you how good it is so i’m gonna jump right into my thoughts

*The opening of the prologue reminded me an awful lot of the saga of darren shan, it was okay in this context but i’d just make note of that, sometimes if you write and the same time as your reading a book I find that your story or characters can sound a lot like whatever you were reading when you read it back haha.

*With the cracks on the stairs i was thinking ‘show me don’t tell me’ Like it would be cool if you show him jumping over a step and hopping to the left or something rather than just telling us he knows where the cracks are.

*Character descriptions are good but I wouldn’t include so much description of clothes

I’m fairly sure i had other thoughts but i can’t remember what they were now

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Cheshire Cat
Posted: 17 June 2012 08:49 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 112 ]
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Thanks so much! I agree on everything.. I am changing the prologue anyway’ and I love describing characters!

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When I’m bored, I send a text to a random number saying “I hid the body…, now what?”

Me: I am a Ninja!
Friend: No, you’re not!
Me: Did you see me do that?
Friend: Do what?
Me: Exactly!

#1 rule in an argument: If you’re losing, start correcting their grammar.

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