Kernal opened a window, to let Grubbs, Bec, himself and…Larten Crepsley threw to Lord Loss’s castle. When they got there, Art was in a cage, gaurded by Vien. “I will deal Vein.” Larten said, as he walked over to the dog and crocidile hybrid. Larten ran around Vein with fast movements, and he reached into his pocket and produced a small knife. He rammed it into the Vein’s eye, it opens and a blue jelly-like subtance comes out. He headbutted Vein, and the creature is knocked unconsious. “Wow! He is good.” Grubbs said, and Spine jumped on Grubbs’ back. He tries to drive his stinger threw Grubbs’ eyes, but Grubbs reacted fast and ripped off the stinger. Blood spurs out of Spine, Grubbs litraly took out his spine! Kernal ran to Art’s cage and broke the locks, and held him tight in his arms. Grubbs, Bec and Kernal all wonder where the hell is Lord Loss?“It’s a crule world we live in guys, and people think my kind and Grubbs’ are the cause of it. And you all asked me from the start who I am. I’m Quicksilver, a vampire. The vampire genrals belive that Lord Loss is the cause to many vampires’ death’s. I am here to stop him.“Larten said. “Ha, vampires are scum of the earth!” Lord Loss said, “YOU!” Larten shouts, and he bruns towards Lord Loss and punches his mangled face. Lord Loss was to slow, they had already passed threw the window. “They forgot somthing Lord Loss said. And Art was no more, he was now Artery again. “Welcome back.” Lord Loss said to him. Larten had failed his mission, and so did Grubbs, Bec and Kernal; the war is still on! The stories are not over!!! TOTAL DESTRUCTION is gonna be uploaded on 5th of January!!!

DID ANYONE LIKE IT?????

I like it but try adding more description and describing words to your wrting it will make is sound and flow better .

You spelled Kernel wrong.

You got a good few spellings wrong. I liked it other then that.

Its actualy good except it is Kernel not Kernal

5th of Feb, TOTAL DESTRUCTION IS COMING!!!!

It’s quite good, though a little bit rough around the edges. There is plenty of action - and above all - imagination going on here.

Its good, but I think you need to add a tiny bit more description, apart from thats its really GOOD! well done! Check out my RPG, that is started off, its called RPG cats.